The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. (20 mins.)
The two pie charts illustrate the online shopping of four types of retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010.
From an
overall
perspective, the food & Beverage
and, Correct your spelling
and beverage
the
Video Games sectors showed Correct article usage
apply
Correct article usage
a significantly
significantly increased
from 2005 to 2010, Replace the word
significant increase
while
the Electronics & Appliances
and the Home Furnishings retail sectors decreased Correct your spelling
and appliances
by
during Change preposition
apply
the
time.
Regarding Correct determiner usage
that
the
online shopping in the year 2005, the largest retail source was Correct article usage
apply
the
Correct article usage
apply
electronic
& Replace the word
electronics
appliances
around 35%. Correct word choice
and appliances
On the other hand
, the least essential retail sector was the
video games around 18%.
Correct article usage
apply
According to
the
online shopping in the year 2010, Correct article usage
apply
the
Correct article usage
apply
electronic
& Replace the word
electronics
appliances
, which Correct word choice
and appliances
it
used to be popular over 5 years ago, declined to 30% from 35%. The food & Correct pronoun usage
apply
beverage
sector became the most retail source Correct word choice
and beverage
instead
by increasing to 32% from 22% of total sale
. It was the most significant Fix the agreement mistake
sales
changed
as much as 10%, Replace the word
change
while
the home furnishings, which it was less demand
dropped to15% from 25% in 2005.Change preposition
in demand
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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