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The charts show world pineapple exports by the top three pineapple-producing countries in 2009 and 2019, and a breakdown of the cost to the consumer of each pineapple in 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts show world pineapple exports by the top three pineapple-producing countries in 2009 and 2019, and a breakdown of the cost to the consumer of each pineapple in 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given graphs illustrate global
pineapple
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 exports by the top three
pineapple
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-producing states between 2009 and 2019
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 and provide information about a detail of the charge to the buyer per
pineapple
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 in 2019. Units are measured in metric
tonnes
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.
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, there were significant differences in the total of
pineapple
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 exported by
country
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 A and
country
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 B in 2009 and 2019, with the majority of
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charges
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 imposed on
consumer
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consumers
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 in 2019
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 distribution &
retail
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and retail
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charge
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. In terms of the highest
pineapple
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 exporter at the start,
country
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 B started at around 5 metric
tonnes
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 in 2009 before significantly decreasing to below 2 metric
tonnes
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 in the next 10 years.
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,
country
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 A began at around 1.5 metric
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 and dramatically soared and peaked at above 10 metric
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 in 2019, which overtook
country
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 B. Meanwhile,
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 C did not experience any noticeable growth
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 and remained stable. Regarding the detailed price burdened to consumers in 2019, distribution &
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 had the largest share of costs, which accounted for 35%, followed by profit (18%), taxes (16%) and international transport (12%).
On the other hand
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, other fetches –
such
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 as import licenses,
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 and export costs – contributed 10% or less of the price.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pineapple, tonnes, country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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