Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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People have different views about whether the principal issues in recent years are the extinction of some species of
animals
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and
plants
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or significant threats to the environment.
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the loss of
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and
plants
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is a serious problem, I would lean towards the latter opinion. I believe that
climate
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change
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is the most disastrous issue for humanity and the
earth
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. On the one hand, many individuals believe that disappearing particular
plants
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and
animals
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on the
earth
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can impact our
lives
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drastically.
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, when a type of vegetation disappears, an array of insects and birds that were fed on that plant will die out.
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, the food chain is destroyed, and
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the lack of enough
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we will end up with famine. These days, a wide range of wildlife
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are endangered by extinction.
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, many dangerous
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that will be eaten by disappeared species, and are hazardous to humans'
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will emerge.
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, in recent years we have encountered
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change
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and its detrimental impacts which threaten the chance of survival on the
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for all species.
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, extreme weather
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climate
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change
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such
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as hurricanes, floods, and tsunamis destroys many rural areas especially coastal areas, and financial loss.
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, global warming causes the retreating of natural glaciers, and
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the altitude of the seas and the oceans increases, so people who live in coastal areas lose their homes.
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, global warming increases the rate of evaporation and we will face a shortage of water in the near future.
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, the
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will no longer be a decent place for life as it will turn into a desert. In conclusion, in my opinion,
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change
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can affect our
lives
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negatively in a way that cannot be compensated, and even threaten the
lives
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of
animals
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and
plants
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on the
earth
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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