Some people believe that the best way to solve environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles. Others think that there are alternative ways to achieve this. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In these modern days, environmental problems have become a serious issue that cannot be ignored by everyone. When it comes to how to deal with
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obstacle, some
people
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trust that
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raising
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the price of
fuel
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for vehicles is the best way to
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take
it.
While
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I strongly disagree with
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view, I believe there are more approaches to achieve
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. First of all, vehicles play a vital role in
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everyone's
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life, a
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majority
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of
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must
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have
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a car
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or motorbike as their transportation,
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fuel
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and fuel
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is the basis to
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these
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vehicles
. There is
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no
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doubt that increasing the cost of petrol will
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some
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, obviously reducing the amount of
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using cars. The less of
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using
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car
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cars
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, they
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choose carpooling,
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,
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the traffic
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congestion problem can be mitigated and air pollution as well.
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, it will
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come
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some disadvantages to
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the economic
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economic
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economy
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of the country.
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the law of demand, if the price of
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increase
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increases
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, the demand
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for
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it will decrease as well, because
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consumer
consumers
have limited
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financial
to spend,
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and the
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industry of
fuel
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will
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hard.
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, I consider it is not
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best way to address environmental
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.
On the contrary
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,
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the government
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should promote environmental awareness to
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the public
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by organising camps or speeches about
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topic.
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, eco-friendly activities can be conducted so that participants can learn information
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as
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the 3R
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principle - reduce, reuse and recycle.
People
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will have
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the opportunity
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to
know
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learn
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more about
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the greenhouse
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effect, global warming and the effect of climate change. Recently, deforestation, illegal fishing and pollution activities have been carried out and affected our earth critically. In these cases,
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the government
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should
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tax
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taxes
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to punish those lawbreakers to decrease environmental threats.
Besides
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, moral values and environmental knowledge can be taught in school to promote awareness among students. As an individual, our
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contributions
are limited, but many a
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little
makes mickle, we can
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do
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some activities in our daily
life
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lives
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,
for example
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, participating in eco-friendly events, carpooling,
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and saving
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water and energy. Taking everything into a nutshell,
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increase
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increasing
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the cost of petrol
of
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apply
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vehicle
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vehicles
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could be a way to protect our environment, particularly
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by reducing
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the amount of
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transport
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on
road
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the road
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,
but
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apply
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I personally would say that there are alternative ways to achieve
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target
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