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The graph shows the number of marriages and divorces in the UK between 1975 and 2000.

The graph shows the number of marriages and divorces in the UK between 1975 and 2000.
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The line graph illustrates the
number
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 of
marriages
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 and divorces in the UK over a period of 25 years from 1975 to 2000.
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,
while
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 the total
number
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 of
marriages
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 increased,
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the
number
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 of first
marriages
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 declined between 1975 and 2000. The data for divorces rose steadily. In terms of the total
number
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 of
marriages
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 started at 490
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marriages
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 in the UK in 1975, and
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 data considerably grew to 640
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 in 1985. From 1985 to 1995, the figure climbed moderately from 640 to 560
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. The
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 rose again to 570
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at the end
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 of the period.
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, the figure for first
marriages
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 grew from 340 to 410
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 between 1975 and 1985,
then
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 the
number
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 declined steadily to 310
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 in 2000.
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, the data for the second
marriages
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 was about 150
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 in 1975
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 went up to about 250
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 in 2000. The figures for divorces reached 95
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 in the year
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1975, it almost doubled and reached about 250
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 in 2000.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, marriages, thousands with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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