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the graph below shows the differences in wheat exports over three different areas. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. Write at least 150 words.

the graph below shows the differences in wheat exports over three different areas. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. Write at least 150 words.
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The line chart given depicts the
amount
 of
wheat
 exports (in millions of
tonnes
) in three different areas namely Australia,
Canada
, and
European
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the European
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 Community from 1985 to 1990. Generally,
although
Canada
 started with the highest
amount
 of
wheat
 exports,
European
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the European
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 Community finished
at
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in
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 the first place.
To begin
 with,
Canada
 exported the highest
amount
 of
wheat
 at the beginning of the period (around 19
million
tonnes
). It
also
 experienced a
fluctuative
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fluctuating
fluctuation
 trend and got the peak at 25
million
tonnes
 in 1988. Yet,
Canada
 finished in
the
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apply
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second place
at the end
 of the period.
However
,
European
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the European
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 Community exported
wheat
 at around 17
million
tonnes
 in 1985. It got the highest
amount
 of
wheat
 exports at 21
million
tonnes
 in 1990 compared to the two other areas and finished in the first place.
Additionally
, Australia saw a downward trend throughout the period. It began at 15
million
tonnes
 in 1985
then
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and then
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 rose
until
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to
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 around 16
million
tonnes
 in 1986.
Moreover
, it gradually declined from 1985 to 1990 (until 11
million
tonnes
at the end
).
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, wheat, tonnes, canada, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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