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Nowadays plastic waste is one of the most serious environment products in the world. What are the reason of at half to solve this problem?

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It is undoubtedly the case that urban areas around the world increasingly suffer from
plastic
waste
. There are several reasons for
this
 problem, and various measures could be taken by governments and individuals to improve the situation. There are a variety of different factors that have led to
plastic
waste
. One of the major causes can be that the amount of
plastic
waste
 we produce has increased. The second reason is that the demand of people to buy production advanced and improved
product
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 has increased. The third reason is that take away,
coffe
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coffee
 is a good example of it. Despite some obvious reasons described above, there are several actions that governments could take to solve the problems.
Firstly
, a simple solution would be
to
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that
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 it
tend
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tends
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 to
depends
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 on consumer culture. The second measure would be for governments to many people are slaves to fashion.
Finally
, it is common for people to buy new products. In conclusion, despite some obvious reasons, various measures can be taken to tackle the problem of government and individuals
are controlled
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 produce to reduce
plastic
waste
.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that your main points are clearly stated and directly related to the question. This essay lacks clear, specific main points hence hindering full comprehension of your argument. Focus on developing each point fully.
coherence cohesion
Introduce each paragraph with a topic sentence that signals the content of the paragraph to the reader. The essay could benefit from sharper topic sentences to guide the reader through the arguments.
coherence cohesion
Include a clear introduction and conclusion. While you have included these, they could be more concise and informative, presenting a clear thesis statement and a summary of your main points.
task achievement
You should aim to address all parts of the task. Here you have identified the problems but not clearly addressed the second part of the task which asks for reasons to 'solve' the problem. Expand your response to make sure all parts of the task are completely and evenly covered.
task achievement
Develop your ideas comprehensively by elaborating on how they pertain to the question. Some of the solutions and reasons given in the essay are too general or poorly explained. Give more detail and depth to each point to show a deeper understanding of the topic.
task achievement
Include more specific examples and details to support your main points. This essay provides some reasons and solutions, but it lacks specific, relevant examples to illustrate the ideas and arguments fully. Specifics help convey the practical aspects of your arguments more convincingly.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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