The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for producton and consumption of electricity in 2014.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for producton and consumption of electricity in 2014.
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The bar chart compares the
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of energy consumption and generation in ten important countries in 2014.
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china
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China
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and the United States had the highest
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in both producing and consuming electric power. In all countries, the usage was higher than in production except for Germany. As can be seen from the bar chart, china had the highest number in both terms accounting for 5.398 in generation and that was lower for utilizing by a narrow margin. Followed by the United
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in the second place, the
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of producing power measured at 4.099,
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that for Russia was as low as a quarter, approximately 1000. the
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of consumption for the former was just under 3.9900 and that for the latter stood at 1.038. France had a wider range of differences between the two operations, around 1000.
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, Korea ranked the lowest on the list, with 485 for generation and 449.5 for utilization. Japan, India, Canada, France, and
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Brazil
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had the
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in the range under 1000 and above 500.
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