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Some people believe that the main purpose of education is to prepare students for the world of work. Others believe that the main purpose of education is to develop students' minds and personalities. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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few individuals are thinking about
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 for working ,
while
others
 believe that
education
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build
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 personality and improve
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their mindset
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 ,in my opinion ,
education
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played
 a huge role in working phases ,but it is more important to make
some
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one
 educate and
openmind
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open mind
 in term of
life
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one
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one
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to
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employe
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employees
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,because when
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human beings study specifically in
one
 major they get
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 of information about it
also
 they can teach
others
 how they should
work
 perfectly and professionally .
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according
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one
 of the research that
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have
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 of the
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it said , those people who
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 able to read and write and
hey
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 are literacy can be creative more than
others
 . in my view , having
certificatione
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certification
certifications
 is really crucial in
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 of
work
 but not all time
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 to we know that
non everyone
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 gets a job which
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matches
 whit their qualification .
on the other hand
 , qualification is the main way to change
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individuals
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 mindset ,
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since
,if we can not read or write
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of course
we
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life
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continue
in order to if we have educated and know what is wrong and right is easy for us to face on some
setiuation
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situations
situation
 that happen in our
life
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for instance
 ,when
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 passed university
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applyed
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applied
apply
 for
job
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a job
the job
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 which was
challengeing
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challenging
 because full of men
i
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 was just once female among about 15 male
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 because
i
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 have been educated
taht
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that
 how
i
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 fit in with other so my
experince
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experience
helped me to successful in that
work
 . in conclusion ,
education
 is
importan
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important
 for our
work
pases
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passes
in
term
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terms
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 of collecting money or knowing how
work
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 with
others
 ,but it is the most vital to express our personality and
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build
our
life
 .
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Develop your main points with specific examples and explanations. Each idea should be expanded upon with evidence or examples to strengthen your argument.
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Address all parts of the task. Make sure to discuss both views presented in the essay prompt and provide a clear opinion. Each viewpoint should be explored thoroughly to show complete task achievement.
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Use relevant examples to support your points. While it is important to include examples, they must be directly related to the argument and effectively illustrate your perspective. Think about how your examples reinforce the main points of your essay.

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