Some people believe that the main purpose of education is to prepare students for the world of work. Others believe that the main purpose of education is to develop students' minds and personalities. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

few individuals are thinking about
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for working ,
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education
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build
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personality and improve
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their mindset
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,in my opinion ,
education
has
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played
a huge role in working phases ,but it is more important to make
some
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one
educate and
openmind
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open mind
in term of
life
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hand ,nowadays having certification is
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to
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employe
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employees
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,because when
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human beings study specifically in
one
major they get
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a lot
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of information about it
also
they can teach
others
how they should
work
perfectly and professionally .
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according
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one
of the research that
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have
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been written
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one
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it said , those people who
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able to read and write and
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are literacy can be creative more than
others
. in my view , having
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certification
certifications
is really crucial in
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of
work
but not all time
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to we know that
non everyone
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gets a job which
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matches
whit their qualification .
on the other hand
, qualification is the main way to change
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individuals
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mindset ,
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since
,if we can not read or write
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of course
we
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don't
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life
with all down and ups we may
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continue
in order to if we have educated and know what is wrong and right is easy for us to face on some
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situations
situation
that happen in our
life
,
for instance
,when
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passed university
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applyed
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applied
apply
for
job
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a job
the job
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which was
challengeing
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challenging
because full of men
i
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was just once female among about 15 male
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because
i
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have been educated
taht
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that
how
i
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fit in with other so my
experince
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experience
helped me to successful in that
work
. in conclusion ,
education
is
importan
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important
for our
work
pases
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passes
in
term
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terms
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of collecting money or knowing how
work
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to work
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with
others
,but it is the most vital to express our personality and
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build
our
life
.
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