Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
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World
became aware of environmental Correct article usage
The world
problems
that resulted in a reduction of human quality of life. Use synonyms
However
, people still argue whether Linking Words
loss
of particular Correct article usage
the loss
species
of flora and fauna is the main one and others Use synonyms
who said
there are more related Wrong verb form
say
problems
. In my opinion, there are several living things that need to be preserved for a better environment, but to do that we need to do more comprehensive Use synonyms
problems
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such
as global warming and the rise of Linking Words
sea
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level
.
On one hand, once a Use synonyms
species
becomes extinct, it can not be restored. As a Use synonyms
consequences
, the food chain can be disrupted which results in losses of endemic flora and fauna which are iconic in one’s country. Correct the article-noun agreement
consequence
For instance
, when the only Linking Words
large-fruit eating
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large-fruit-eating
animals
, Dodo birds, Use synonyms
declared
gone and Add a missing verb
were declared
can
not be found anymore, many scientists stated Wrong verb form
could
on
their observation that many big fruits Change preposition
apply
have
not dispersed and many other small Wrong verb form
had
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animals
populations Change the noun form
animal
are
declining. Not only thatWrong verb form
were
,
but Remove the comma
apply
also
Dodo birds are endemic only in Mauritius Island, so other countries can not help to repopulate Dodo birds until now, Linking Words
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however
the small island is so remote and there are no effects on the Add a comma
however,
world
's flora and fauna.
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On the other hand
, Linking Words
to choose
which Change the verb form
choosing
species
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that
are the most important to be protected Correct pronoun usage
apply
are
hard and each country has their own unique Correct subject-verb agreement
is
species
, so other important Use synonyms
problems
like global warming and the rise of Use synonyms
sea
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level
are the most needed to tackle in Use synonyms
this
era. Global warming has caused the loss of habitat of many temperature-sensitive Linking Words
species
in the Use synonyms
world
, which could result in Use synonyms
failure
of biodiversity. The other Correct article usage
the failure
problems
that have a direct impact Use synonyms
is
Change the verb form
are
rising
Correct article usage
the rising
sea
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level
which Fix the agreement mistake
levels
has
drowned cities and islands inhabited by humans. They are not the only reason these phenomena happened, but Correct subject-verb agreement
have
it
can be traced to Correct pronoun usage
they
others
reasons and preventions for Correct quantifier usage
other
better
environment in the whole Add an article
a better
world
.
In conclusion, environmental Use synonyms
problems
do not mainly only affect the number of Use synonyms
animals
and plants. Only by joining hands to deal with more important and whole Use synonyms
problems
like global warming and the rise of Use synonyms
sea
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level
, these Use synonyms
animals
, plants, and human society can Use synonyms
also
have a better life and chance to keep living.Linking Words
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task achievement
While the essay addresses the task, some aspects of the response could be more fully extended. It is necessary to fully explore all parts of the task. When discussing both views, ensure they are equally developed, and examples must be specific and clearly linked to the points being made.
coherence cohesion
The logical structuring of the essay requires attention. Make use of a clear and logical order for ideas which builds an argument systematically. Use a range of cohesive devices to aid clarity and coherency, while avoiding overuse or misuse which can hinder understanding.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite