In some countries, younger people are neglecting their right to vote. What problems does this cause and what are some of the possible solutions?
Denoted as a democracy assurance in a national regime, elections held by several nations
has
unsolved Change the verb form
have
problems
, at least until nowadays, juveniles have less to nothing
willingness to choose their representative, so public interest cannot be accommodated well. Rephrase
no
This
phenomenon likely occurs because of
the representative Change preposition
apply
unable
to show their vision and has skills beneath the expectation. Add a missing verb
is unable
Moreover
, it is possible to solve this
Change the determiner
this problem
these problems
problems
by providing better campaign materials and extension methods.
First,
it is clear for the legislators before entering the parliament to provide a lucid proposed development plan in the next few years. Thereby, voters might have a better understanding of their expected life. This
matters includes
poverty issues, health insurance Change the verb form
include
problems
, environment
Replace the word
environmental
problems
, and education The younger generation will pay more attention to these topics, maybe because of their better education than the older one. So, it is important for the campaigners to provide clear substance in their tools.
Second,
education levels likely become imperative on
young Change preposition
in
people
's assessment of their representative. Thus
, the people
who did the campaign will only has
two options, become more educated with several titles, or make an accusation by embellishing a clear illustration Change the verb form
have
on
their social responsibility projects or clever way to solve environmental issues in their agenda. Change preposition
of
Furthermore
, entitling the
Correct article usage
apply
people
by
several “smart” labels may not really be important, but the youth may have a slight interest in them that influences their willingness to choose. If Change preposition
to
this
can be accommodated, it may reduce the high possibility to ignore
their right to vote.
Change preposition
of ignoring
To conclude
, young generations have a great role in an election. Yet, their ability to criticize more creates imminent unsolved problems
. The least way to avert this
is by providing a better campaign. Hence
, it can minimize the young people
to
neglect their vote, and the public Fix the infinitive
apply
importances
can be Fix the agreement mistake
importance
accomodated
well.Correct your spelling
accommodated
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