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The table illustrates the data about income of secendory/high school teachers in five country in 2009.

The table illustrates the data about income of secendory/high school teachers in five country in 2009.
The table illustrates the data about income of
secendory
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secondary
/high school teachers in five
country
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countries
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 in 2009.
Overall
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, the highest
saleries
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salaries
 belonged to
Luxembourg
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.
Although
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 the lowest amount of starting was
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Japan
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in Japan
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,
Australia
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was
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 the least in
the
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apply
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salary per year and maximum figure. In terms of starting,
Luxembourg
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 accounted for 80,000, which was ahead of
Denmark
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 at 47,000, followed by
Australia
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,
Korea
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 and
Japan
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 at 34,6000, 30,500 and 28,000 respectively. Regarding salary per
year
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Luxembourg
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 was the first at 112,000,
makking
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making
 it higher than
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denmark
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Denmark
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 and
Korea
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 both at nearly 53,000.
Finally
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,
japan
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 comprised 49,000 and
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australia
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Australia
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 was 48,000.
Whith
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maximum
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the maximum
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,
luxambourg
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Luxembourg
 was by far the highest figure at 139.000.
Although
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Korea
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 made up 84,000 and
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japan
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Japan
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was
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62,400,
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denmark
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Denmark
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and
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australia
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Australia
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 stood at 54,000 and 48,000 respectively. About
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years
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the years
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 taken to reach
top
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the top
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 salary, it
longed
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took
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 37
years
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 in
Korea
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that
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which
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 was more than,
Japan
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 at 34 and
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luxembourg
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Luxembourg
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 at 30
years
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.
In contrast
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,
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denmark
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Denmark
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 and
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australia
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Australia
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 were just under 10
years
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words luxembourg, japan, australia, denmark, korea, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "data" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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