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The table below gives information about Salaries of Secondry / high school teachers in five countries .

The table below gives information about Salaries of Secondry / high school teachers in five countries .
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data
 about wages of
Secondry
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secondary
/high school schoolteachers in five different Countries.
Over all
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, all Countries at the same range in the starting salaries except Luxembourg
teachers
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 take nearly
tripled
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of
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what Australian takes.
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Japan
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 Korea and Denmark nearly are the same with a slight difference.
Teachers
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 in
Lurxembourg
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Luxembourg
 break the records by being the number 1 in starting and increasing Salemen after
years
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, where
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begin
 with 80,000 and after 15
years
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 up to 119,00• And with 30
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 of working rise it in
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132 ,000 .
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 it's not like
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 in Australia where
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they
 get only 28,000
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 the start which it's lower than half of what Luxembourg
teachors
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teachers
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 just working for 9
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the maximum salary which it's only 48,000.
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 it's not the same in Denmark, Korea and
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. Staring with
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 the lowest income to
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 in schools by 30,000 and with spending 15
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 and over it will
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rise
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 to 48,000 ,but if
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thier
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their
 career over 34
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 they will get 82,000.
Japan
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 and Denmark with 34,000 and 45,000 respectively as the
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beginning
 incomes , anel getting 54,000 as the maximum by only spending 8
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a schoolmen
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,
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finally
teachers
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Japan
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 earned 86,000 as the limit
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the
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salary.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words teachers, japan, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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