Homelessness in increasingly in many major city's around the world. What are the problem and give solutions.
More and more
people
have no their own house in many part
of the world. Change to a plural noun
parts
This
problem causes
by competitive employment in the workplace with Wrong verb form
is caused
low quality
Add a hyphen
low-quality
of
human Change preposition
apply
resource
leads to poverty. Fix the agreement mistake
resources
However
, the government can give social assistance as well as
mini training for getting a better job
as viable solutions.
Most people
become homeless because their quality as a person is fairly bad in this
competitive days which Correct determiner usage
these
make
them have no Correct subject-verb agreement
makes
job
and
income. Correct word choice
or
Hence
, they barely pay their
primary needs Change preposition
for their
such
as food and living place. Consequently
, they end up living on the road. For instance
, Nigeria, a country with the most homeless population in the world, have no appropriate access to the most basic services that
Correct pronoun usage
which
make
their citizens Correct subject-verb agreement
makes
must be
considered Verb problem
apply
as
homeless Change preposition
apply
people
.
On the other hand
, the
governance Correct article usage
apply
have
Change the verb form
has
main
role Correct article usage
a main
for
giving Change preposition
in
solution
to Fix the agreement mistake
solutions
this
issue. From citizen's tax, the executive can make program
for homeless Fix the agreement mistake
programs
people
with social assistance and job
training for short
time. It will be helpful because they can use the funds whether for building small Add an article
a short
business
or trying to get at least a rough Fix the agreement mistake
businesses
job
. In addition
, they will have their own salaries and continue their better life. For example
, in Indonesia, there is a monthly program for unhoused individuals which the government will give money to them and a nursing home for elderly
who do not have any Correct article usage
the elderly
family's
Change noun form
family
member
.
In conclusion, Fix the agreement mistake
members
while
there are several steps that countries can take to solve homelessness such
as giving modals and colloquium, the problem caused by this
issue have
major impacts Change the verb form
has
to
the cities.Change preposition
on
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