Homelessness in increasingly in many major city's around the world. What are the problem and give solutions.

More and more
people
have no their own house in many
part
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of the world.
This
problem
causes
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by competitive employment in the workplace with
low quality
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of
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human
resource
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resources
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leads to poverty.
However
, the government can give social assistance
as well as
mini training for getting a better
job
as viable solutions. Most
people
become homeless because their quality as a person is fairly bad in
this
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these
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competitive days which
make
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them have no
job
and
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or
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income.
Hence
, they barely pay
their
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primary needs
such
as food and living place.
Consequently
, they end up living on the road.
For instance
, Nigeria, a country with the most homeless population in the world, have no appropriate access to the most basic services
that
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make
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their citizens
must be
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considered
as
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homeless
people
.
On the other hand
,
the
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governance
have
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main
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a main
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role
for
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giving
solution
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solutions
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to
this
issue. From citizen's tax, the executive can make
program
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programs
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for homeless
people
with social assistance and
job
training for
short
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time. It will be helpful because they can use the funds whether for building small
business
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businesses
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or trying to get at least a rough
job
.
In addition
, they will have their own salaries and continue their better life.
For example
, in Indonesia, there is a monthly program for unhoused individuals which the government will give money to them and a nursing home for
elderly
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the elderly
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who do not have any
family's
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family
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member
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members
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. In conclusion,
while
there are several steps that countries can take to solve homelessness
such
as giving modals and colloquium, the problem caused by
this
issue
have
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has
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major impacts
to
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the cities.
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