The chart below gives information about Southland’s main exports in 2000, *20…, and future projections for 2025.

The chart below gives information about Southland’s main exports in 2000, *20…, and future projections for 2025.
The bar chart illustrates the proportion of
exports
in different sectors of Southland in 2000,
present
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the present
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year
and the prediction for 2025.
Overall
, the highest export
earning
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earnings
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recorded from international tourism and dairy
products
in 2000 and
also
are
in
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apply
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this
year
while
lowest
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the lowest
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amount of
earning
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earnings
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recorded from meat
products
.Only the international tourism
sector
is predicted higher amount of
exports
in 2025. When it comes to
the
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international tourism, it earned just over 8
billion
from
exports
in 2000.
However
, the number of income
is
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has
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increased
in
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this
year
.
Furthermore
, it may be anticipated that the
earning
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earnings
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from
this
sector
will be increased to just below 9
billion
in 2025.
On the other hand
,dairy product perspective, it can be noticeable that the
sector
exported approximately 7
billion
worth
products
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of products
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in 2000
while
it has
been
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risen to about 10
billion
in
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this
year
.
Moreover
, the
sector
aims
9.5
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for 9.5
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billion
of
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exports
which seems a slight drop. with regards to Meat
products
, It can be seen that 6
billion
worth
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of earning
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earning
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earnings
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in 2000.But, the amount has been
droped
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dropped
to approximately 5.6
billion
in the current
year
.Which
also
has predicted exactly 5
billion
export income of
this
sector
in 2025.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words exports, year, products, sector, billion with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.

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  • Exports, main exports, projections, trends, significant changes, increased, decreased, speculate, external factors, global demand, technological advancements, trade policies, agriculture, technology, manufacturing, economic implications, employment, GDP, economic growth, global economic trends
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