some sporting events famous it is negative impact or positive give your opinion

Sport
became
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one of
most
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famous
activity
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in
this
world nowadays. It is because of its negative and positive impact
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our
body
and society,
such
as
make
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us
more healthy
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and build
body
shape, but
also
have
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potential
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in risk of exploitation and human rights violations.
This
essay will discuss both
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of these
sport
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impacts. When we say about positive impact, we all know that
sport
bring
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brings
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much good impact. First of all,
sport
is one of the
way
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taht
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that
expert
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experts
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recommend us to do to encourage
healthy
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lifestyle. These days,
for example
, we often see
influencer
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influencers
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or
celebrity
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celebrities
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who have good
body
shape will increase awareness to their fans to do
sport
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sports
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like them to get the same
body
figure.
Moreover
, someone who
good
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at
sport
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sports
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have
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opportunities to join international
sport competition
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sports competitions
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that will
cretaing
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create
personal or national pride. Because of
this
, we can say that
sport
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will
bring
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our
life
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lives
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more valuable and active at the same time.
On the other hand
, we can see in many countries there is
explonation
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explanation
exploration
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • national pride
  • unity
  • boosting local economies
  • infrastructure development
  • healthy lifestyles
  • role models
  • social issues
  • global platform
  • advocacy
  • international peace
  • fair play
  • -
  • public funds
  • essential services
  • environmental harm
  • ecosystems
  • nationalism
  • xenophobia
  • commercialization
  • sportsmanship
  • sponsorships
  • exploitation
  • human rights violations
  • displacement
  • working conditions
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