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Some people think that testing on animals is necessary for discovering medicine that helps fight diseases, while others believe it is not necessary to test on animals for this reason. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Introduction
Even though medical equipment and knowledge are developed well, some new diseases are discovered and need to be addressed. For
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 matter, an argument appears regarding the medicine testing on
animals
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. Some people believe that testing is essential to check the effectiveness
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 the other group think it is unnecessary. I believe that both opinions have pros and cons, and I stand with the idea of testing medicine on non-human subjects.
Body · 1
To begin
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 with, sample testing of a new cure on
animals
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 is urgently needed for human needs, and I agree.
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, doing research on
animals
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 is known to be less risky. In general, the medical researcher needs to prevent any side effects caused by the medicine. To address
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, they need to do a thorough assessment but implementing it on another human may be fatal to the subject. So, they need
animals
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 that resemble someone's body parts as subjects. Another reason is that it is cost-effective. It is because the research usually tests the meds on
animals
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 which is known to be found easily,
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 as mice.
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, they do not have to spend a high price.
Body · 2
Albeit beneficial, animal testing is opposed by animal lovers. The main reason for
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 idea is based on moral values.
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 community believe that
animals
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 are
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 living creatures who have the right to live, but applying the test to them is hurting them.
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, they believe that the volunteering system is a better idea for medical testing. It means that the public who are willing to be tested can apply as a research subject. In
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 way, the medical team can find a more suitable reaction to the medication.
Conclusion
In conclusion, testing new meds on non-human subjects is needed for humanities because it is less risky and cheaper. Despite those reasons, some people believe that
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 testing is against their morale.

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Coherence and Cohesion
Try to create a clear and logical structure through your essay, making sure that each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next. To improve, use linking words effectively and ensure that the relationship between your ideas is clear.
Task Achievement
Offer a well-developed response to the task, including all parts of the task within your essay. Make sure to discuss both views fully before providing your own opinion, giving equal attention to each part of the prompt.
Task Achievement
Support your main points with relevant and specific examples. Your examples should clearly connect to the arguments you're making and be detailed enough to provide depth to your essay.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Ethical dilemmas
  • Medical breakthroughs
  • In vitro (test tube) experiments
  • Alternatives to animal testing
  • Clinical trials
  • Vivisection
  • Biomedical research
  • Animal welfare/rights
  • Cross-species extrapolation
  • Compassionate use
  • Cruelty-free practices
  • Suffering alleviation
  • Genetic engineering
  • Speciesism
  • Human-animal physiological differences
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