Difference between countries become less evident each year.Nowadays all the over world, people share the same fashions, advertising,brands,eating habits, Tv channels. Do the advantage of this trend outweigh the disadvantage.

The uniqueness of every
countries
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in the
world
have
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been
more
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replaced
with
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globalisation. Having
same
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inspiration
on
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fashion, advertising, and every
sectors
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in life from one country to
other
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another
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countries
make
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it less interesting for
tourists
and
lose
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its own
styles
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.
While
,
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it is
adaptale
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adaptable
for
people
if they want to travel around the
world
, the disadvantages still outweigh the advantages in
this
issue. Losing real culture because of the immense development of modern
trend
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and
rule
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is the main
drawbacks
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. The purpose of
tourists
travelling from one particular nation to
other nations
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must be
for looking
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its
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unique civilization, which if it has
no
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many differences,
it
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will be less interesting.
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, Indonesia which
have
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many
vary
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ethnics with their own
style
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styles
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customs,
food
, and
house
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started to fade because of
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influnce
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influence
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tourists
should taste
indonesia
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food
, they end up eating
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food
in
the
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restaurants.
On the other hand
, some
people
feel relieved when they travel overseas and find that
place
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have similar types of
food
,
custom
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customs
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and
habit
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habits
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with
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their homeland, especially students and workers from other
countries
.
Also
, it will be helpful for connecting and talking to other
people
when you have
same
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interests.
For instance
,
traveller
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from
muslim
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countries
must be faced problems when it comes to
food
because their religion
have
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its own rule.
Hence
, in many parts of the
world
, restaurants already have halal
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making
easier
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for
muslim
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people
when they want to eat without worrying about breaking the rules. In conclusion,
although
there are advantages
for
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globalisation with some reasoned
statement
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such
as it is adaptable for foreign
tourists
when they travel, the disadvantages still greatly outweigh the advantages
with
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preserving uniqueness in every
countries
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Globalization
  • Cultural exchange
  • Homogenization
  • Cultural erosion
  • Multinational companies
  • Economic benefits
  • Global cooperation
  • Standardization
  • Cultural identities
  • Cultural imperialism
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