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Some people think that paying tax is their only duty, while others believe that we have more responsibilities toward society. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

#people #tax #duty #responsibilities #society
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A group of individuals present the view that their sole
responsibility
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 is to pay
taxes
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,
whereas
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 others believe that we have additional duties toward
society
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. I strongly agree with the latter opinion. On the one hand, some
people
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 justifiably argue that in order to have a better
society
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, we have to undertake many responsibilities.
For example
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,
people
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 should be responsible for keeping their surrounding area. A vast number of
people
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 are unaware of the consequences of damaging the
environment
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.
Therefore
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,
government
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 should raise public awareness about the consequences of threatening the
environment
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.
This
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 is
also
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 worth mentioning that recyclable garbage should be separated from other garbage in the house. From an environmental viewpoint, social
responsibility
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 plays a vital role in preserving the
environment
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. In order to protect the
environment
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, we should be encouraged to purchase environmentally friendly products.
On the other hand
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, another group of
people
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 claim that the
government
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 is responsible for providing essential services
such
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 as healthcare and public safety to its citizens. They insist that the
government
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 have a
responsibility
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 to implement policies and regulations to protect the
environment
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.
However
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, I do not find
this
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 argument convincing as everyone should help the
government
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 in the improvement and development of the country and paying
taxes
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 is not enough.
Besides
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,
taxes
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 are mainly spent on urban and welfare facilities.
To conclude
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, in my view,
people
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's effort and
responsibility
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 is a decisive factor in having a good
society
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. in order to have a better
society
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, we have to undertake many responsibilities.
Moreover
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, everyone should help the
government
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 in the improvement and development of the country and paying
taxes
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 is not enough.
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coherence cohesion
To enhance your essay, try to incorporate a wider range of linking words and phrases to ensure smoother transitions between ideas.
task achievement
While your essay covers the task well, it could be improved by including more varied and specific examples to support your arguments. This will strengthen your points and make your essay more convincing.
coherence cohesion
Your essay structure is clear, with an introduction, body paragraphs that discuss both views, and a conclusion summarizing your own standpoint.
task achievement
You have effectively addressed the topic and provided a well-reasoned argument for your opinion, demonstrating a good comprehension of the task.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • fiscal responsibilities
  • state's revenues
  • societal structures
  • moral and societal duties
  • community service
  • environmental sustainability
  • democratic processes
  • efficiency
  • utilizing tax revenues
  • social issues
  • redundant
  • active citizenship
  • civic engagement
  • personal and collective efforts
  • societal enhancement
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