The pie chart below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malasia in the year 2010

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These pie charts illustrate the mid-range of household consumption in both countries of

Japan

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and

Malaysia

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in the year 2010. At one glance, it can be detected that most of the waste in

Malaysia

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is caused by housing issues.

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, in

Japan

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, other goods and services have had been cost more than other items. Transporting and health care expenditures in

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have been

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double the range in

Malaysia

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, charts demonstrate items

such

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as food and other goods and services did not differ much or have a minimally higher fraction.

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, budget spending in

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not only covered the basic needs of people but

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resulted

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better statements about public satisfaction in comparison to

Malaysia

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