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One of your friends wants to apply for a job at a summer school camp as a sports trainer. Write a letter to the camp manager to recommend your friends. In your letter: say how well you know your friend describe the qualifications and experience that your friend has explain why your friend would be suitable for this job

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to recommend my friend, John, for the position of
sports
 trainer at your summer school camp. Let me tell you more about him.
Firstly
, I have known John for nine years and he has a passion for teaching
sports
 skills to children. He can freely communicate with children. John has previous experience working as a
sports
 trainer for a city
center
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 school where he demonstrated his skills and experience. His proficiency in volleyball and handball is remarkable. I personally participated in training with him and he
is ability
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has been able
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 to dominate and motivate others. I am sure that Brown's great experience, skill, diligence, responsibility,
ability
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and ability
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 to get along well with others make him exceptionally well-suited for the role of
sports
 trainer at your camp. I hope you will consider my suggestion and offer him
this
 opportunity. Thank you for your attention to
this
 matter. Yours faithfully, Samandar
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Task Achievement
In the first paragraph, it's beneficial to directly mention the position and the purpose of the letter, which you have done well. However, you could enhance the introduction by briefly summarizing why John is suitable for the position, for a more impactful beginning.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your paragraphs are well-structured, each focusing on a unique aspect of John's qualifications and suitability for the job. To further improve clarity, consider using transitional phrases or sentences at the beginning or end of each paragraph to better link them together.
General
Make sure to proofread your letter to correct minor mistakes, such as 'he is ability' which should be 'his ability'. Attention to such details will ensure your letter is perceived as professional and polished.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ardent enthusiast
  • physical education
  • sportsmanship
  • pragmatic approach
  • diligence
  • team spirit
  • engaging personality
  • mentorship
  • leadership qualities
  • communication skills
  • first-aid certified
  • discipline
  • adaptability
  • youth mentor
  • enthusiastic
  • influential coach
  • role model
  • positive reinforcement
  • camaraderie
  • empathy
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