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When it comes to the Tet holiday, our Lunar New Year, which is also known as Tet in Vietnam, it is one of Vietnam’s most anticipated events. It often occurs between late January and early February, lasting three to four days starting on the first day of the lunar calendar.

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When it comes to the
Tet
 holiday, our Lunar New
Year
, which is
also
 known as
Tet
 in Vietnam,
it
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is one of Vietnam’s most anticipated events. It often occurs between late January and early February, lasting three to four days starting on the first day of the lunar calendar. Traditionally, families would make foods like sugar-preserved fruit,
chung
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 cake, and spare cake before
Tet
. Pilgrimages and family gatherings are
also
 observed during
Tet
.
This
time
 of
year
 brings people from all across the nation back to their hometowns to spend
time
 with their relatives. Adults use
this
time
 to pay respects to their ancestral relatives and offer prayers for a successful new
year
.
In addition
, they may receive lucky money on
Tet
, and kids eagerly anticipate the holiday. For myself and Vietnamese people generally,
Tet
 is unquestionably the most important holiday. It is among the most well-known customs and has been observed for countless years.
This
 is a
time
 to take it slow, reflect on the previous
year
, and rejuvenate for the next one.
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introduction
While your introduction to the topic is clear, providing a brief overview of what will be discussed can help to establish a stronger foundation for your essay.
coherence
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea, and use a variety of linking words and phrases to improve the flow of your essay.
cohesion
To improve cohesion, try to connect your ideas more explicitly. This can be demonstrated by referring back to key concepts or by using pronouns to maintain reference cohesion.
main points
Support your main points with more detailed examples and explanations. Not only mention the customs but also explain their significance or how they impact cultural and social life.
task response
To address the task more completely, expand on the personal and cultural significance of Tet. Describe how the holiday affects various aspects of Vietnamese life, such as family relationships, economy, and society at large.
language range
Use a wider range of vocabulary and sentence structures to more effectively convey your points and add sophistication to your essay.
conclusion
Consider writing a concluding paragraph that summarizes your main points and provides a sense of closure to your essay.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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