The table and chart show data from a survey of library users. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The table and chart show data from a survey of library users.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
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This
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figure compares
behaviour
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the behaviour
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on
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of
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each age group
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library
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of library
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users when visiting the
library
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in 2012. The majority of
library
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users are high schoolers (16-17
years
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old),
where
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and
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they are most likely to get help
by
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the librarian. Meanwhile, most of the early workers (25-29
years
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old) and university pupils (18-24
years
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old) think
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library
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the library
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is important.
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, most
visitors
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using
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use
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library
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the library
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for research purposes. High schoolers in 2012 had tendencies to visit
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library
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the library
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most often. 72% of 16-17
years
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old pupils had used the
library
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and 43% of the
visitors
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got help from the librarian to find their needs.
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,
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library
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the libraries
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was
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were
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not that popular among the
age
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ages
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starting from 18 to 29
years
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old, as only half of the population have ever
got
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into the
library
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. It is
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in line
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with the numbers of these two age group's
visitors
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who got helped by the librarian
for
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approximately 20%.
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, with the declining
visitors
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trend, the majority of university students and
the
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apply
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early workers thought that
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library
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the library
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was important. There
are
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is
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variety
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a variety
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on
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of
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what
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activities
did
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people do in the
library
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. The majority of
visitors
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enjoy
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library
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the library
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to help them
a
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research.
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the least visitor did was to borrow newspapers.
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borrow
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books is still considered
as
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popular,
but
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it seems that
it
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it is
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only popular among
the
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high schoolers.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words library, years, visitors with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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