The table and chart show data from a survey of library users. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
This
figure compares Linking Words
behaviour
Correct article usage
the behaviour
on
each age group Change preposition
of
Use synonyms
library
users when visiting the Change preposition
of library
library
in 2012. The majority of Use synonyms
library
users are high schoolers (16-17 Use synonyms
years
old), Use synonyms
where
they are most likely to get help Correct word choice
and
by
the librarian. Meanwhile, most of the early workers (25-29 Change preposition
from
years
old) and university pupils (18-24 Use synonyms
years
old) think Use synonyms
Use synonyms
library
is important. Add an article
the library
a library
In addition
, most Linking Words
visitors
Use synonyms
using
Wrong verb form
use
Use synonyms
library
for research purposes.
High schoolers in 2012 had tendencies to visit Add an article
the library
a library
Use synonyms
library
most often. 72% of 16-17 Correct article usage
the library
years
old pupils had used the Use synonyms
library
and 43% of the Use synonyms
visitors
got help from the librarian to find their needs. Use synonyms
Linking Words
Whereas
, Correct word choice
However
Use synonyms
library
Replace the word
the libraries
was
not that popular among the Correct subject-verb agreement
were
age
starting from 18 to 29 Fix the agreement mistake
ages
years
old, as only half of the population have ever Use synonyms
got
into the Replace the word
gotten
library
. It is Use synonyms
inline
with the numbers of these two age group's Correct your spelling
in line
visitors
who got helped by the librarian Use synonyms
for
approximately 20%. Change preposition
apply
Conversely
, with the declining Linking Words
visitors
trend, the majority of university students and Use synonyms
the
early workers thought that Correct article usage
apply
Use synonyms
library
was important.
There Correct article usage
the library
are
Change the verb form
is
variety
Add an article
a variety
on
Change preposition
of
what
activities Correct pronoun usage
apply
did
people do in the Unnecessary verb
apply
library
. The majority of Use synonyms
visitors
enjoy Use synonyms
Use synonyms
library
to help them Correct article usage
the library
a
research. Remove the article
apply
Whereas
the least visitor did was to borrow newspapers. Linking Words
Although
Linking Words
borrow
books is still considered Wrong verb form
borrowing
as
popular, Change preposition
apply
but
it seems that Remove the conjunction
apply
it
only popular among Add a verb
it is
it was
the
high schoolers.Correct article usage
apply
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words library, years, visitors with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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