Some people would say that parents should pay their children for small home duties (cleaning, washing dishes). Other would disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Parents are the first
teacher
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teachers
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of their children and some people say that children need to be
paied
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paid
for smaller
task
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tasks
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at
home
. Which has pros and cons, I will present both sides of the viewpoint in
coming
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the coming
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paragraphs and will
conculde
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conclude
in the end. You reap what you sow, what we are doing and teaching our kids the same they are going to do in
future
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the future
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. If we are
teching
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teaching
them the way society
work
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works
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and the basic
ecomony
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economy
cycle in their childhood
then
they will not fail in managing their finances.
Home
is the biggest institute where they can gain
this
knowledge,
hence
parents can use the rewards for their small
seervings
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servings
serving
at
home
instead
of free pocket money.
This
method will
surly
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surely
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teach them good mathematics
as well as
the importance of time and money.
For instance
, if my son
need
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a break
for
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from
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playing video
game
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games
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then
he has to help his mother
for dusting
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dust
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at
home
,
this
helped
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helps
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him to keep his surroundings clean.
On the other hand
, if we follow the same
practic
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practice
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for each and every task
then
they can misinterpret
this
as everything is give and take.
This
could
also
affect their family relations
,
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because we know
relationship
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relationships
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does
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do
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not work like money so love and affection
is
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are
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equally important.
Furthermore
, there is a very thin line between reward and
respons
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response
. They should be educated using rewards but at the same
time
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time,
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they should be made aware
about
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of
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being responsible. Without
devoation
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deviation
devotion
about
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the relationship
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relationships
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relationship
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relationship,
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they can not become
a
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good
humanbeing
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human beings
. To
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conclude
, there is nothing wrong
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with educting
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educting
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educating
kids by giving rewards and I support
this
statement but at the same
time
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time,
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they
also
need to be taught
the
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human values so that they will be able to give
values
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value
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to
relationship
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relationships
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also
.
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