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Some believe that we should invent a new language for international communication. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages.

#believe #language #communication #outweigh
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 of the most recent trends of today's world is the upsurge in
ccreating
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creating
 a new
language
. There is a widespread belief
some
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 people. I strongly agree with
this
 stance and in
this
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the arguments
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arguments
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argument
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.
On the other hand
,
language
 is the main barrier in
this
 contemporary society.
In other words
, different nations speak
variety
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a variety
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 kind of
language
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languages
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 which can not
understand
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everyone
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by everyone
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.
Therefore
, people
unable
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are unable
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 to gather with each
others
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other
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. It makes a long distance
each
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for each
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societies
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society
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.
Hence
, it is important to introduce a new
language
. First and foremost,
for
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by
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 using
same
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the same
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language
 every
nationals
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nation is
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 able to share their ideas,
culture
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 values, education and so on.
For instance
, if every person
speak
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 in English, they have
chance
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a chance
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 to study anywhere without any convenience, which means that IELTS/PTE/TOFEL exams are the major
language
 requirements for higher studies.
Furthermore
, there is a way to gain job opportunities throughout the world.
According to
 what has already been discussed, there is
a
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myriad
benefits
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for
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iinventing
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inventing
 a new
language
. On the one hand, creating a new
language
have
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has
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 an undeniable influence on society, which comes with negative consequences. Using
same
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language
 culture might destroy. In conclusion,
although
 people
does
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 not have social distance it is crucial to acknowledge certain noticeable downsides.
Nonetheless
, these advantages, the disadvantages can indeed be ignored. I firmly believe that we should invent a new
language
 for international communication.
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coherence cohesion
To enhance the logical structure of your essay, create a clear outline before writing. Begin with an introduction that paraphrases the question and states your opinion clearly. Organize the body paragraphs by discussing one main idea per paragraph, and ensure each idea directly relates to the question. Use transitional phrases to connect ideas and paragraphs smoothly. For the coherence and cohesion score to improve, focus on these elements.
task achievement
For better task achievement, ensure you respond fully to the task by addressing both the advantages and disadvantages equally. Each point should be well-developed with clear explanations and relevant examples. Offer a balanced view, or if you choose to take a side, explain why one outweighs the other convincingly. Avoid partially finished thoughts or unsupported claims to increase the complete response, clear comprehensive ideas, and use of relevant specific examples scores.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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