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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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A glance at the bar chart provided reveals some information about the percentage of fresh
coffee
 and
instant
coffee
 bought by Australians, and
also
cafe
 customers in
last
 month in five different cities,
namel
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namely
 Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane,
Adelaide
, and Hobart.
Overall
,
it is clear that
number
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a number
the number
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 of those who went to a
cafe
 for
coffee
 or tea
are
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is
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 greater than those who bought
instant
coffee
 or fresh
coffee
, except in
Adelaide
 which shows a relatively similar amount for
instant
coffe
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coffee
 buyers and those who went to
cafe
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the cafe
a cafe
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. People of Sydney, Melbourne, and Hobart have the habit of going to a
cafe
 for drinking, and over 60% of them did
this
 throughout the given period. By
contrst
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contrast
, residents of
Adelaide
 have the least proportion
in
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of
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 going to a
cafe
 with just under 50 per cent of, meanwhile just over 55% of individuals in Brisbane have the habit of drinking
coffee
 in a
cafe
. In the
last
 four weeks,
instant
coffee
 was much more popular than fresh
coffee
 in all these cities.
Instant
coffee
 made up between 50 and 55 per cent of approaches in Hobart, Brisbane, and
Adelaide
, as opposed to fresh
coffee
 which accounted for under 40% in these cities at the corresponding time.
Moreover
, figures for approaches of
instant
coffee
 and fresh
coffee
 are
relativley
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relatively
 the same in Melbourne and Sydney, with under
a
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apply
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half of
populace
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the populace
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 for both.
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