In many countries, small shops are closing. Give your reasons about this. Is it positive or negative? Give examples from your knowledge and experience.
There is no doubt that
cumerism
has changed over the past few decades around the globe. Correct your spelling
consumerism
Therefore
, small retail establishments are stopping their services Linking Words
due to
the Linking Words
business
loss. In my view, Use synonyms
this
is a Linking Words
neagative
development Correct your spelling
negative
as
ample reasons to substantiate it.
First and foremost, the local retail Correct your spelling
has
business
Use synonyms
have
a significant role in the Change the verb form
has
economical
and social development of the area. Replace the word
economic
In other words
, the local Linking Words
business
Use synonyms
are
not only the place for shopping but Change the verb form
is
also
it is culturally linked with the society. Linking Words
For example
, Linking Words
the
local Correct article usage
apply
Use synonyms
business
often sponsor local events Fix the agreement mistake
businesses
such
as book fairs, Linking Words
carnivals
Correct word choice
and carnivals
with
Change preposition
in
the
Correct article usage
apply
collabration
with local authorities. Correct your spelling
collaboration
Furthermore
, the local Linking Words
shops
Use synonyms
are obviously support
local Change the verb form
obviously support
product
which would develop Fix the agreement mistake
products
manufacturing
and agricultural sectors in the area. Correct article usage
the manufacturing
In contrast
, since corporate retail Linking Words
oragnisations
, Correct your spelling
organisations
organisation
arguably
,Add a missing verb
are arguably
profit oriented
, they may import cheaper products Add a hyphen
profit-oriented
instead
.
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Furthermore
, the local Linking Words
shops
Use synonyms
are often provide
credit to Change the verb form
often provide
needed
people as they Replace the word
needy
know
each other for Wrong verb form
have known
long
time. The local Change the article
a long
shops
support the residents to provide groceries without money which they can pay Use synonyms
latter
. Correct your spelling
later
Consequently
, the larger retail Linking Words
business
establishment may not provide credit Use synonyms
service
to their clients. Fix the agreement mistake
services
Similarly
, Linking Words
while
the domestic Linking Words
business
may purchase from different vendors, the larger retail groups might have their own production and distribution Use synonyms
service
. Fix the agreement mistake
services
As a result
, the money will not be distributed back to the society.
In conclusion, the socio-economically the small Linking Words
retails
Replace the word
retail
shops
are linked with the society. Use synonyms
Moreover
, the Linking Words
needed
people would get benefit from them, ergo, I believe that the local Replace the word
needy
shops
should be protected.Use synonyms
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