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We are becoming increasingly dependent on computer-based technology. How do you think it will change in the future? Is it good for us to rely so much on computers?

#technology #change #future #computers
It is important to consider how people
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 modern technology and our reliance on computer-based technology has become more pronounced than ever before.
This
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benefit from using it more. In
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 our dependency on computer-based
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,those kind of
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, Artificial Intelligence (AI) is
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 over the world, and creators adapting it
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 every sphere from agriculture to architecture. To clarify, using AI helps to reduce human factors, which is
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 to work consistently and without human errors.
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 taking advantage
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 computer-based
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 never reduce.
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, using computer
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 or educational institutes
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 by technology and it
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 undeniable.
For instance
, COVID-19 period all educational institutions were not able to organize offline classes, so by using
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 they taught students via online lessons.
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, delivery services can be another reason to use more computer-based
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 one clicking, all types of products
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 time, which individuals can spend on other crucial activities. In conclusion,
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Structure
Make sure your essay includes an introduction that clearly presents the topic and your thesis, as well as a conclusion that summarizes the main points and restates your view.
Linking
To improve coherence, use a range of linking words and phrases to connect ideas more effectively throughout the essay.
Development
Develop your main points more thoroughly with additional details or examples, and ensure that these are explicitly linked back to the question posed.
Completion
Complete the essay by providing a well-rounded conclusion, this is essential for a satisfactory task response.
Task Response
To achieve a better score, you should provide a fully developed response to all parts of the task, with a clear position throughout the response.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Artificial Intelligence (AI)
  • Machine Learning
  • Automated
  • Internet of Things (IoT)
  • Telecommuting
  • Digital Technology
  • Virtual Workplaces
  • Computer-assisted
  • Healthcare Industry
  • Reliance
  • Privacy
  • Human Interaction
  • Job Displacement
  • Automation
  • Digital Divide
  • Cybersecurity
  • Internet Safety
  • Digital Crime
  • Ethical Considerations
  • Environmental Impacts
  • E-waste
  • Carbon Footprint
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