The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017 Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph illustrates the
number
of people
been
to an Correct pronoun usage
who been
island
in Caribbean
and had their Correct article usage
the Caribbean
accommodation
on Fix the agreement mistake
accommodations
cruise
ships or island
in the Fix the agreement mistake
islands
years
of
2010 to 2017Change preposition
apply
by
. Units are measured by Change preposition
apply
millions
.
Overall
, the total number
of visitors has showed
a dramatic increase in the given period. There are more Change the verb form
shown
people
prefer
to stay on the Correct pronoun usage
who prefer
island
compared to cruise
ship
in the first Fix the agreement mistake
ships
year
. However
, it has changed for the last
year
in the given period, which there are more tourists prefer
to stay on Correct pronoun usage
who prefer
cruise
ship
.
Fix the agreement mistake
ships
In contrast
, the number
of visitors who prefer to stay on cruise
ship
had a slight increase in 2011 to 0.5 Fix the agreement mistake
ships
millions
, but Change to singular
million
then
it dropped to nearly half in the year
of 2012. Change preposition
On
In
the one hand, the Change preposition
On
people
who prefer to stay on Correct quantifier usage
number of people
Correct article usage
the island
island
has Correct article usage
the island
Wrong verb form
remained
remain
unchanged from the Wrong verb form
remained
year
of 2010 to 2011, at 0.75 Fix the agreement mistake
million
millions
.
Fix the agreement mistake
million
In
the other hand, the Change preposition
On
number
of visitors who prefer to stay on cruise
ships was
increased from the Unnecessary verb
apply
years
of 2012 to 2017, and it hits
2 Wrong verb form
hit
millions
Change to singular
million
people
in the last
year
which was almost double compared to the first year
. However
, the number
of people
who prefer to stay on island
has not much changes after it Correct article usage
the island
has
showed a slight increase in the Unnecessary verb
apply
years
of
2011 to 2012. The Change preposition
apply
number
of tourists remain
unchanged for Wrong verb form
remained
few
Correct article usage
a few
years
and it had a slight dropped and went up at
1.5 Change preposition
to
millions
in the Change to singular
million
last
year
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, people, island, cruise, years, millions, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 3 times.
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