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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017 Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017 Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates the
number
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 of
people
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been
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who been
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 to an
island
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 in
Caribbean
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the Caribbean
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 and had their
accommodation
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accommodations
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 on
cruise
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 ships or
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island
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islands
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 in the
years
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of
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apply
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2010 to 2017
by
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apply
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. Units are measured by
millions
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.
Overall
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, the total
number
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 of visitors has
showed
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shown
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 a dramatic increase in the given period. There are more
people
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prefer
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who prefer
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 to stay on the
island
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 compared to
cruise
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ship
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ships
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 in the first
year
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.
However
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, it has changed for the
last
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year
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 in the given period, which there are more tourists
prefer
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who prefer
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 to stay on
cruise
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ship
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ships
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.
In contrast
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, the
number
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 of visitors who prefer to stay on
cruise
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ship
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ships
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 had a slight increase in 2011 to 0.5
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millions
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million
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, but
then
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 it dropped to nearly half in the
year
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 of 2012.
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On
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In
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On
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 the one hand, the
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people
Correct quantifier usage
number of people
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 who prefer to stay on
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the island
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island
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the island
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 has
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remained
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remain
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remained
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 unchanged from the
year
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 of 2010 to 2011, at 0.75
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Fix the agreement mistake
million
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millions
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million
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.
In
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On
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 the other hand, the
number
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 of visitors who prefer to stay on
cruise
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 ships
was
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apply
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increased from the
years
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 of 2012 to 2017, and it
hits
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hit
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 2
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millions
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million
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people
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 in the
last
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year
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 which was almost double compared to the first
year
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.
However
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, the
number
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 of
people
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 who prefer to stay on
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island
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the island
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 has not much changes after it
has
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apply
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showed a slight increase in the
years
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of
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apply
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2011 to 2012. The
number
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 of tourists
remain
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remained
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 unchanged for
few
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a few
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years
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 and it had a slight dropped and went up
at
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to
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 1.5
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millions
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million
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 in the
last
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year
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, people, island, cruise, years, millions, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Tourists
  • Caribbean
  • Visit
  • Graph
  • Summarize
  • Trend
  • Fluctuate
  • Peak season
  • Anomalies
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Comparisons
  • Sector
  • Significant
  • Patterns
  • Overview
  • Analyze
  • Data
  • Year-on-year
  • Percentage
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