Some people feel that there should be a fixed punishment for each type of crime. Others feel that the circumstances of an offence should be taken into account when deciding on a punishment. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Dealing with criminals is often one of the most controversial activities since the prosecutor
have
to judge the matter based on both the moral side and the harsh legal side. Different types of crimes have vastly different punishments that can Correct subject-verb agreement
has
also
be based on the context of the crime
. This
has led some people pushing
to set Change the verb form
to push
a
unchanged punishment for a certain type of wrongdoings, Change the article
an
while
others argued
that the Wrong verb form
argue
circumstances
of the crime
matters
. Fix the agreement mistake
matter
This
essay will discuss both views, as well as
giving
its own opinion.
On one hand, the background of how the Wrong verb form
give
crime
happened is very important since it plays an integral role in deciding on
if the criminal should be charged guilty or not. Change preposition
apply
For example
, if the incident happened while
the alleged criminal’s mental health is at concerning levels, the judges
should lower the punishments. The setting can also
help judges
on deciding
whether the Wrong verb form
decide
suspect
is guilty or not. If a suspect
was deemed to have executed the crime
but most of the evidence found in the site doesn’t relate to the suspect
, the judge should reconsider their decisions
. All of Fix the agreement mistake
decision
this
is to say the circumstances
of a crime
has
played a huge role in helping Correct subject-verb agreement
have
judges
determine their own decisions
,
and will continue to do so.
Remove the comma
apply
On the other hand
, having a fixed punishment for a type of crime
eliminates the need for a lengthy court battle. If the suspect
is deemed guilty, then
no matter what the context could be, the judge would charge them the same as others that
share the same wrongdoing. Correct pronoun usage
who
This
could help the judges
make more fair decisions
and less
dependent on their emotions. Add a missing verb
be less
However
, judging a criminal without knowing the circumstances
can have severe consequences as the suspect
may not have Verb problem
apply
been
pleaded guilty as they might have been provoked or Unnecessary verb
apply
Change preposition
in
at
Change preposition
in
a
unstable state of mental health.
To summarize, Correct article usage
an
judges
should take circumstances
into consideration to help make fairer and more accurate decisions
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introduction
Ensure your essay has a clear introductory paragraph that introduces the topic and clearly states your position or thesis.
cohesion
Use a range of cohesive devices and paragraphing to organize your essay and ideas effectively.
development
Develop each paragraph with a clear main idea and supporting sentences that expand on the main idea; use examples to support your arguments.
task response
Address all parts of the task, ensuring you provide a balanced discussion of both views, followed by a clear, well-supported conclusion that reflects your own opinion.
relevance
Maintain a clear position throughout the response and present ideas, arguments, and examples that are directly relevant to the topic.
repetition
Avoid repeating points and strive to develop your main points with clarity and depth.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.
Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.
When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.
Linking words for giving examples:
- for example
- for instance
- to illustrate this
- to give a clear example
- such as
- namely
- to illustrate
- take, for example
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