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The table below shows the weight of people in a particular country from 1999 to 2009.

The table below shows the weight of people in a particular country from 1999 to 2009.
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The table gives information about the
weight
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 of individuals in a particular area between 1999 and 2009. The figures are shown for both genders. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective,
it is clear that
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 the percentage of
the
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overweight
men
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 was more than underweight.
In contrast
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, with
women
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's patterns. Despite
this
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, the proportion of normal
weight
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 for both genders remained approximately stable. A deep analysis of the table illustrates that the ratio of
women
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, who had
the
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a
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weight
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 less than the average did not see any changes over the ten years, there were 27%, 29% and 28% respectively. Meanwhile, the figure for
normal
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normal-weight
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weight
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women
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 slightly fluctuated between 47% and 51%. In the same way, the figure for overweight
women
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 showed slight volatility.
On the other hand
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, in 1999 the indicator of normal
weight
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men
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 was 41%,
however
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, in 2004 the figure experienced an upward trend growing by 7% and until 2009 did not significantly change.
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, the percentage of overweight
men
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 witnessed a constant fall from 30% to 19% over the ten years.
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 the proportion of underweight
men
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 fluctuated between 20% and 23% from 1999 to 2009.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words weight, men, women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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