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Some people think importing foreign movies and TV programs is good for a country's culture. Others believe it is better to produce these locally. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, a large number of
movies
 and television
programs
 are telecasted all around the globe. It is often argued by some
people
 that
this
 is a positive development, whilst others disagree and think it will lead to adverse ramifications.
This
 essay will discuss that the importation of these
programs
 is beneficial for one's own country. Importing foreign
movies
 and TV
programs
 can introduce a country to different cultures, promoting diversity and global understanding.
In other words
, local
people
 become aware of different cultural norms and traditions leading to cultural integration.
In addition
 to
this
, exposure to various film styles and storytelling can enhance creativity and inspire local producers. Bollywood
movies
,
for example
, are broadcast to other nations, making
people
 familiar with Hindi and other languages, India's diverse living styles, different cuisines, and festivals
such
 as Diwali and Holi.
However
, many disagree and feel that it would be better to produce them at the local level. Imported content might dominate local
culture
, overshadowing traditional values and local arts.
Moreover
, local production of
movies
 and TV
programs
 can preserve cultural identity and promote national pride. Despite
this
, one's own
culture
 can be safeguarded by cultural heritage and introducing
culture
-related
programs
 locally. For illustration,
people
 in the present era living in Punjab have a vast knowledge of their Sikh history and
culture
, which are being told by their ancestors and
further
 taught to the young generation. In conclusion,
while
 globalization through TV channels introduces
people
 to diverse cultures and traditions,
while
 still feel that it should be limited to one's own country and not allowed to be telecast in other countries.
However
, as long as
people
 consider the importance of their own
culture
 to learn, there is no harm in indulging
people
 towards other cultures.
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Task Achievement & Coherence/Cohesion
Be sure to fully develop your main points with clear supporting details and examples. Avoid general statements without specific evidence or examples.
Task Achievement
Work on creating a more balanced discussion of both views before presenting a clear personal opinion in the conclusion. Each perspective should be equally evaluated.
Coherence/Cohesion
Improve your paragraphing by ensuring each paragraph presents a clear main idea and that all sentences within it cohesively support that idea.
Task Achievement & Coherence/Cohesion
Ensure that your concluding paragraph accurately summarizes the points made throughout the essay and reflects your personal stance, providing a clear answer to the question posed.

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  • for instance
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  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural diversity
  • global understanding
  • dominate
  • traditional values
  • national pride
  • preserve cultural identity
  • creative industry
  • balanced approach
  • regulate
  • cultural exchange
  • collaboration
  • universal appeal
  • overshadow
  • inspire
  • storytelling
  • boost the economy
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