The line graph shows the global demand of different types of textile from 1980 to 2015.

The line graph shows the global demand of different types of textile from 1980 to 2015.
The line graph illustrates the production of four types of textile (
polyester
,
cotton
,
cellulosic
and
wool
) from 1980 to 2015.
Overall
, it is evident that all kinds of materials had increased from time to time, except
wool
.
Also
,
cotton
started as the highest demand
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off second-best in the end given period by
polyester
. Looking at the details, in 1980,
cotton
and
polyester
started with 12
million
tons
and 5
million
tons
, respectively, and constantly inclined and reached 20
million
tons
at the same time in 1995.
While
cotton
had
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fluctuated over 20 years and rose to about 32
million
tons
,
polyester
constantly inclined and reached a peak at almost 70
million
tons
in 2015.
Cellulosic
, which
in
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third
positions
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by 1980, had more merely 1
million
tons
than
wool
. In 1986 and 2000, both of them had
same
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amounts
by
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approximately 2
million
tons
and had different trends in the next 15 years in which
cellulosic
almost reached 10
million
tons
and
wool
plummeted
one tenth
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of
cellulosic
to 1
million
tons
.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Global demand
  • Textile industry
  • Natural fibers
  • Synthetic fibers
  • Manufacturing advancements
  • Fashion trends
  • Consumer preferences
  • Economic factors
  • Purchasing power
  • Eco-friendly materials
  • Market share
  • Production capacity
  • Polyester
  • Cotton
  • Wool
  • Nylon
  • Demand curve
  • Sustainability
  • Textile innovation
  • Fluctuations
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