Topic: Some young people are leaving the countryside to live in cities and towns, leaving only old people in the countryside. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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in terms of
age
and kind of place to stay. An increasing number of
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who wants to prolong their career
to
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their urban
centers
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and decide to stay for
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long-term
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,
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can be a hard problem to face. In my opinion,
this
is a negative development which can lead to the inequitable development of society. The
unbalance
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side of
population
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will potentially
give
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a
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harmful situations and
also
problems later on in life. One solid reason that can
arise
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the
youth
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motivation to move to urban
centers
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is
for
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the good life quality. Technology has been continuously growing up to attract the
youth
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great
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the great
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possible
opportunity
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in the city, compared to the side. The
youth
thought
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the stuck improvement from rural areas
is
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no longer promising
them
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. As
result
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, the majority choose to upgrade for
greatest
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sustainability without
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any impact
to
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left populations. Another issue will happen after their migration, neglecting rural areas will have a decrease
value
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in value
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in cultural transmission due
the
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departure of the younger. The increase of
aging
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population
will
feel
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such
a burden
to bound
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for the growth of
population
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.
Therefore
, the huge loss to the number of productivity
age
will cause a deterioration case. The widening gap in technological advancement, decline of local agriculture, accessibility to implement recent skills, and potential to leave behind. Role of the
youth
in
development
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of the rural areas to ameliorate the infrastructure and keep
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positive trends among the
elder
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elderly
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.
Situation
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where
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the younger people can help to enlighten about nowadays technology.
Therefore
, the substantiate for great society will serve so many great
impact
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such
as
possibility
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to increase the number of productivity,
wide
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opportunity to
creat
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a working fields
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working fields
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, controlling one-side
age
population
and procrastinate the delays if only older people stay.  In
conclusions
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,
although
it has become a choice for
young
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age
to move
on
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the
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crowded city for good, their presence still
hold
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important room for greater opportunities for the revitalization of the countryside through the new policies and incentives.
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  • urbanization
  • demographic shift
  • sustainability
  • cultural heritage
  • infrastructural development
  • agricultural decline
  • technological divide
  • rural depopulation
  • economic disparity
  • revitalization efforts
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