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It is common nowadays for each member of family to have their own peace of modern technology . Some people think that this will lead to a break down in the family realationships and communication to what extend do you agree or disagree.

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In our new modern world, each person who is related to a family has a particular personal technological device ;
however
 , a substantial number of individuals guess that
this
 will destroy family ties. Though
,
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I agree with
this
 idea , I will explain some views in
this
 essay to make it clear.
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 , needless to say,
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new technology impacts our lifestyle dramatically in lots of conditions ; in fact , we can not escape from the consequences of what
this
 breakthrough brings to us ; to illustrate , consider each member of a family without their phones, it is out of mind in my imagination;
therefore
 ,
this
 habitat which is a new phenomenon causes some problems
such
 as getting used to loneliness ;
hence
 , everyone pass his
time
 with some new gadgets which have been replaced
instead
 of his family.
On the other hand
, it is crystal clear that there are many attractive applications and websites which can fill our free
time
; indeed, by exploring in virtual world we spend our leisure
time
 alone in order to have fun with our parents and siblings;
therefore
 , our communication would become weak and poor in
time
. In conclusion, to
recaptulate
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recapitulate
 above mentioned ideas I once again reaffirm that I agree with
this
 breakdown which happens because of the technology owned.
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