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The bar chart shows the typical weekday for students in three different countriesSummarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the typical weekday for students in three different countriesSummarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph demonstrates three routins brackets of pupils in the
UK
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, Germany, and Japan. The data indicates the regular
acrivities
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activities
 from Monday to Friday.
Overall
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, Japanese pupils spend much more
time
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 on educational activities and less
for
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on
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 relaxation, but in
Gemany
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Germany
 and the
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UK
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UK,
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 they appropriate almost equal
time
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 to the three groups of activities. In the European
contries
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countries
 (Germany and
UK
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), the pattern is roughly the same. British and German students allocate 7
hours
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 to unwinding.
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, they approximately spend 8
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on
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resting (8.5
hours
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 for British ones).
On the other hand
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,
Germam
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German
 pupils spend a significant amount of
time
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on
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studying (9
hours
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 per
wek
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week
),
while
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 their peers in the
UK
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 spend 1 hour less. In
Jepan
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Japan
, it seems that education accounts for more
hours
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 during the week with 13
hours
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 for
studing
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studying
. Japanese students sleep for 7
hours
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 per day,
however
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, a significant drop is seen in the relaxing
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 and
virtualliy
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virtually
 half of other countries.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, time, hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • typical weekday
  • students
  • academic activities
  • leisure activities
  • rest
  • time spent
  • comparison
  • sleep patterns
  • cultural differences
  • educational system
  • commuting
  • variations
  • schedule
  • highlighting
  • differences
  • similarities
  • anomalies
  • amount of time
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