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You are going to throw a party and would like to cook a special dish for your guests but do not have the recipe. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • tell your friend why you are having a party • explain what dish you want to cook and ask your friend for the recipe • invite your friend to the party

#party #cook #dish #guests #recipe #friend
Dear Sara, How have you been? I missed the wonderful time we had together when I was at Tabesh School. I’m going to throw a
party
 for my 25th birthday on 21 September. Because of
this
party
, I decided to try to cook a strange Greek food. I thought it could be a great surprise for my guests. Given the fact that having watched your new post about Greek foods,
it
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encouraged me to cook
this
 dish. As I remember, it was a potato soup that consisted of potato, meat and butter.
Then
, I thought I’d ask you a huge favour to give the precise recipe for the soup. Sorry for
this
 hassle.
Finally
, I would invite you to come to my
party
. I believe we would spend quality time with each other. It would be a blast! I hope you can make it to come to my
party
. I’m looking forward to receiving a message from you. Best wishes, Mah
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Task Achievement
The letter is clear and covers all the requested points comprehensively. However, the explanation of the dish and the reason you want to cook it could be slightly more detailed to enrich the context.
Coherence and Cohesion
While each paragraph generally sticks to a single idea, there could be a clearer separation between the reason for the party and the description of the dish for better clarity.
Greeting and Closing
The greeting and closing of the letter are very appropriate and friendly, which sets a positive tone.
Coherence and Cohesion
The logical structure of the letter is well-maintained, making it easy to follow.
Writing Tone
The writing tone is suitable for a letter to a friend, maintaining a casual and warm atmosphere.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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