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The bar chart shows the amount of money which was invested by different museums in London.

The bar chart shows the amount of money which was invested by different museums in London.
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The chart illustrates the total of money that was invested by
History
Correct article usage
the History
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Museum
,
British
Museum
, National
Museum
, and Science
Museum
 in London. In general, the bar chart
showed
Wrong verb form
shows
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 the data
of
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on
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investment
 from June to
October
. The
British
Museum
 is the highest
Museum
 that invested some money in every month.
In
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On
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 the other hand, the National
Museum
 always
be
Wrong verb form
been
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 the lowest
museum
 that invested some money. The highest amount of
investment
 from the
British
Museum
 is above 600,000
on
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in
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 August, and the second is
on
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in
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 September, with the number of
investment
is
Wrong verb form
being
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 under 600,000. Same as the
British
Museum
,
on
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in
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 August, the total
investment
 of
History
Correct article usage
the History
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Museum
 is the highest with
the
Correct article usage
a
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 number under 600,000.
In addition
,
on
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in
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October
 the
History
Museum
 only invest above 200,000 . Different between
British
Correct article usage
the British
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Museum
 and
History
Correct article usage
the History
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Museum
, the highest amount of
investment
 from
Science
Correct article usage
the Science
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Museum
 is
on
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in
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 September, and the lowest in
on
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apply
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October
.
Furthermore
,
on
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in
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 August the National
Museum
 only
invest
Wrong verb form
invested
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 above 200,000, and the lowest is
on
Change preposition
in
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October
 with
the
Correct article usage
a
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 number under 200,000.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words history, museum, british, investment, october with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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