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The bar chart shows the amount of money which was invested by different museums in London.

The bar chart shows the amount of money which was invested by different museums in London.
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The chart illustrates the total of money that was invested by
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History
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the History
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Museum
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,
British
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Museum
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, National
Museum
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, and Science
Museum
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 in London. In general, the bar chart
showed
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shows
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 the data
of
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investment
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 from June to
October
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. The
British
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Museum
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 is the highest
Museum
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 that invested some money in every month.
In
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 the other hand, the National
Museum
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 always
be
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 the lowest
museum
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 that invested some money. The highest amount of
investment
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 from the
British
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Museum
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 is above 600,000
on
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in
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 August, and the second is
on
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in
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 September, with the number of
investment
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is
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being
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 under 600,000. Same as the
British
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Museum
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,
on
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in
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 August, the total
investment
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 of
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History
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the History
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Museum
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 is the highest with
the
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a
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 number under 600,000.
In addition
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,
on
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in
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October
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 the
History
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Museum
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 only invest above 200,000 . Different between
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British
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the British
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Museum
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 and
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History
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the History
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Museum
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, the highest amount of
investment
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 from
Science
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the Science
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Museum
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 is
on
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in
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 September, and the lowest in
on
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apply
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October
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.
Furthermore
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,
on
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in
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 August the National
Museum
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 only
invest
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invested
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 above 200,000, and the lowest is
on
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in
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October
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 with
the
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a
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 number under 200,000.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words history, museum, british, investment, october with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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