Some people think that there should be strict laws to control the amount of noise a person makes because of the disturbance it causes to people. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages

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it is essential for each and every
perosn
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person
to know about
noise
pollution in
country
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the country
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. Some individuals argue that there should be strict laws to control the
noise
which
person
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people
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move
beause
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because
of the
disturbone
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disturbance
it
harm
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to
pubic
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public
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. There are both advantages
as well as
disadvantages
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a trend. My inclination will be justified in
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ensuring
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paragraphs
which valid
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reasons
and proper examples. To commence with, in
the
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recent
time
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times
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, there are vorious
type
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types
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of
noise
which
make
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are made
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by
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the pubilc
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pubilc
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public
. There should be strict
law
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laws
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of
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to
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control loud
noise
. To be more praise, if
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
take
step
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a step
the step
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to make a strict law to handle
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loud
speaker
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speakers
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, it will
very
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benefical
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beneficial
for
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the pubilc
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pubilc
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public
. Because they get good sleep and
concetrate
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concentrate
on their study or worth
for example
, In
canada
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goverment
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government
made
strict
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a strict
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law about
noise
in 2015.
Canada
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Canadian
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goverment
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government
Banned
loud speakers
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loudspeakers
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after 9 pm.
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Consequently
,
noise
pollution decreased in
canada
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Canada
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and
also
,
people
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and people
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got good sleep and
refresh
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refreshed
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their
mind
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minds
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.
On the other hand
, There
are
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serveat
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several
disadvantage
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about
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this
trend.
People
donot
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do not
enjoy their
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festivals
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, wadding and
event
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events
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without
loud
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a loud
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speaker
.
This
is to say that,
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
Baaned
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Made
loud
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a loud
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noise
in
India
. Because of
this
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this person
these people
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people
donot
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do not
don't
celelbrate
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celebrate
celebrated
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the festival
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festival
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festivals
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with
joyful
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joy
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and fun and they get Board. As an
eptione
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option
,
India
is a
diverest
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different
country
people
celelbrate
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celebrate
all
festival
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festivals
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with
loud
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a loud
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sound
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sounds
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, But in 2022
India
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Indian
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goverment
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government
Banned
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the loud
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loud
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loudspeaker
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speaker
. Because of
this
,
people
not only get
board
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bored
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,
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but
also
depreased
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depressed
decreased
. and did not celebrate
festival
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the festival
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. if
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government
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
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do not
donot
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does not
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give permission to use
loud
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loudspeaker
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speaker
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speakers
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on
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at
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festival
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festivals
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, one day festival culture will be
disapper
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disappear
in
India
.
To conclude
, I
personaly
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personally
believe that, festival is very essential in
India
.if
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
not
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does not
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give permission, might
one day
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one-day
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the indians
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indians
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Indians
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lost
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lose
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culture
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their culture
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.
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