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Global warming is one of the biggest threats to our envirioment. What causes global warming? What solution are there to this problem?

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These days we are facing towards to one of the major global warming
problems
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 that
they
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are jeopardizing
to
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our natural
world
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.we will discuss what influences climate change and how we can solve these
problems
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 together As we all know we are living in
modern
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a modern
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 society in order to
improving
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improve
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 technology,
facility
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facilities
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 and other significant
sources
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resources
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nevertheless
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 they have been providing vital
problems
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 to the natural
world
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while
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 global warming potential and climate change.There are several causes to modify
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environment
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the environment
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included of
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including
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 air pollution,deforestation,industrial
plant
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plants
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,fossil
fuels
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 and carbon dioxide.Albeit Individuals and
researches
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researchers
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 are
also
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 to blame here because They make an effort to construct more and more facilities or scientists
associating
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 with arbitrary works
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while
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and
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because of them
environment
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 can not
digestion
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 all of these changes.I think behind these strange works,
earth
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the earth
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 is encountering global warming.
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,we need to figure out how we can tackle of global warming issues that we are facing now.
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 vehicles and fossil
fuels
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,they are exceeding around the
world
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 and almost all people have private cars and
i
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this
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 is not a good option,we ought to move from private cars to public vehicles and we can decrease fossil
fuels
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 to transport.
Another issues
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 we need to solve industrial
plant
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plants
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 and deforestation.In
fact
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fact,
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 Forest rates are decreasing and missing nowadays in spite of global warming
is endanger
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while
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instead
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 facilities have overreached around the
world
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 and
thay
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cause
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caused environmental
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environment
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problems
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(global warming).if we had not eroded of tree,we would not have come across
this
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 problem.Now we need to
responsible
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be responsible
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 for
forest
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forests
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 and planting more trees.As for carbon dioxide,
researches
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researchers
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 surveyed for a
while
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 to learn about
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environment
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the environment
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.Global warming
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due
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is due
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 to uncontrolled human activity and
researches
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research
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tried
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trying
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 to commence or terminate
of
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apply
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snow,rain or
cloud
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clouds
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for example
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the
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apply
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plane
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planes
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has
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have
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 spread
the
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clouds and it will be difficult to get rain
as a result
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.
To sum
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up
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up,
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 majority of global warming causes consist of air pollution,deforestation,industrial plant,fossil
fuels
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 and CO2.To solve these
problems
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i
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I
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 believe that we need to change the harmful sources into useful ones

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coherence cohesion
Make sure to start your essay with a clear introduction that outlines the topics that will be discussed. This introduction should include a thesis statement that gives the reader a preview of the main arguments that you will be making.
coherence cohesion
Organize the essay into clear paragraphs, each focusing on a distinct idea. Ensure that the ideas progress logically from one paragraph to the next and that each paragraph starts with a topic sentence that introduces its main idea.
coherence cohesion
Use a range of linking words and phrases to connect ideas within and between paragraphs, for example: 'furthermore,' 'however,' 'in contrast,' 'as a result.' This can improve the flow of the essay and help the reader follow your argument.
coherence cohesion
Avoid long, overly complex sentences. Aim for a mix of simple, compound, and complex sentences to convey your ideas more effectively.
task achievement
Ensure that you respond directly to the task questions. Discuss both the causes and solutions of global warming as the prompt requests, providing clear explanations and specific examples to support your points.
coherence cohesion
Make sure you provide a conclusion that summarises the main points of the essay and restates your position. This creates a sense of closure for the reader.
coherence cohesion
Work on grammatical accuracy, spelling, and punctuation. Regular practice and review can help improve these areas.
task achievement
Include specific examples and evidence to support your arguments about the causes and solutions of global warming. This will make your arguments more compelling and show that you can use relevant information to support your ideas.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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