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Some people think that governments should change the way individuals live, while others believe they should choose the way themselves. Discuss these both points of view and give your opinion?

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Many
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 suppose that their way of life should be controlled by the government, but others seem to want to be free in their way. From my perspective, the beneficial method is to mix both ideas. In
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 essay, I will discuss both views to support my point. On the one hand, if the governments change too much in
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's lives,
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 as by setting unreasonable laws, that can lead to serious consequences like protests of residents.
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, depending on the changes in the lifestyle of inhabitants,
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 could avoid potential dangers, which might come to them.
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, banning the use of stimulates
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 could prevent our bodies from being affected by toxic drugs.
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, A free lifestyle could give
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 the opportunity to do whatever they want, which could be better for their mental health and they can freely think about a lot of new ideas to contribute to society.
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, ignoring the way
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 live could cause an imbalance in society, because some
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 would have a chance to have freedom, which could make
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 feel unsafety when they go out. In conclusion,
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 the changes by governments are true in some cases, others seem not to be effective.
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, I partially agree with
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 assertion.

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Introduction & Conclusion
Ensure there is a clear introduction and conclusion in the essay, stating your opinion and summarizing the main points.
Logical Structure
Organize your main points more effectively and ensure the essay flows logically from one point to the next.
Supporting Points
Develop each point with relevant examples and explanations to support your argument.
Task Response
Address the task by discussing both views entirely and provide a balanced comparison before giving your opinion.
Coherence & Cohesion
Use a variety of linking words and phrases to improve the connections between ideas and paragraphs.

Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nanny state
  • personal freedoms
  • sustainability
  • carbon emissions
  • societal changes
  • empowered
  • regulations
  • democratic societies
  • personal responsibility
  • intervention
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