The bar chart shows the amount of money which was invested by different museums in London.
The graph illustrates the
number
of capital invested into 4 different types of galleries in London from June until October. The research's object
were focused on Replace the word
objectives
Historical
Correct article usage
the Historical
Museum
, British Museum
, National Museum
, and Science Museum
.
The graphs shows
the British Change the verb form
show
museum
received higher investment from the others during 5 months period. Remarkably, the number
sky-rocketed to around 700,000 on
August. Change preposition
in
However
, in the further
period
the trend visualized a significant decline.
Add a comma
period,
In contrast
, the national galleries got the lowest amount of capital in the same period of time. Moving next to the Historical museum
which did not seem to attract many investors as the number
steadily declining
. Science Wrong verb form
declined
museum
, on the other hand
, seemingly to
presents a good performance each Verb problem
apply
months
. Change to a singular noun
month
Furthermore
, the number
stayed placid at around 400,000 during the first 3 months and then
experienced a drastic improvement on
September. Change preposition
in
However
, the science museum
had to face a sudden drop to around 300,000 on
October.Change preposition
in
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, museum with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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