Travelling abroad is regarded as a valuable and good activity for young people, but some think it takes too much time and money. Discuss both view and give opinion.

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Travel to another

country

is a positive experience for developing personality, but it is debated that travelling spent a lot of money and time

instead

of giving some advantages for life.

This

essay will discuss

this

point of view and give an explanation of

this

topic. on the one hand, There are so many benefits for adolescents going abroad as a

traveler

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traveller

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First,

the teenagers could feel enjoyable and happiness for sightseeing the new city that never come to visit.

Then

, youngsters can learn about the diversity of cultures and

ethnics

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ethnicities

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. Because understand about distinction is a positive way to foster young people's personalities.

Second,

exploring attractive activities in the different countries

such

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is such

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a good idea.

For instance

, Trying

snorkeling

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snorkelling

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at the sea, climbing a mountain or playing at Disney playground. All of

this

makes good memories for youngsters. and the other hand, go abroad to a different

country

. obviously, takes much time and money.

moreover

, we can do the same activities in our

country

for example

, enjoying the landscape of

beach

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the beach

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or facing

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the

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challenge of climbing

a local mountains

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local mountains

a local mountain

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. We necessary to explore our

country

's destination first before going abroad, and we

also

can learn about our historical value in our city

instead

travel

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travelling

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abroad. In conclusion, travel

abrod

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abroad

might be beneficial for

youngsters

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youngsters'

youngster's

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memories and experience to learn about diversity and

others

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other

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ethnics

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ethnicities

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Furthermore

, young people can get value after travelling around the world. I believe that

traveling

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travelling

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abroad is important for their lives and improve their spirit to

doing

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their society.

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Your opinion

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

256 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

valuable experiences
broaden horizons
expose to different cultures
promote personal growth
independence
lifelong memories
friendships
time-consuming
costly
planning
preparation
research
transportation
accommodation
meals
learning opportunities
classroom setting
comfort zone
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Your opinion

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