The graph illustrates the information about the percentages of the population living urban areas differences between 6 countries in the years 1950 to 2050.

The graph illustrates the information about the percentages of the population living urban areas differences between 6 countries in the years 1950 to 2050.
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The graph describes in regards the percentages of the
population
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living
urban
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in urban
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areas differences between 6
countries
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between the years 1950 to 2050. The illustration
is providing
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provides
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the numbers of
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percentage
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percentages
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for
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the year
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year
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years
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1950, 2007, and 2050. It
differentiate
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differentiates
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each
year
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with different
shape
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shapes
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of buildings and
colors
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. It can be seen from the image that in the
year
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1950,
Africa
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ranked as the least
country
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with
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population
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a population
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,
following
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followed
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with
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by
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Asia
that
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has only
2
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a 2
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% range from
Africa
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. Ranging significantly from
Africa
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, North
America
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seated as
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was
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the
country
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with the highest
percentage
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in 1950.
Subsequenty
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Subsequently
, there
are
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significant
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the significant
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rise
of
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in
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the percentage
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percentage
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percentages
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for a few
countries
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in 2007,
for
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instance
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instance,
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is
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in
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Asia that
sky rocketed
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skyrocketed
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thrice from 1950, with
the
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a
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percetange
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percentage
of 41%.
Africa
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also
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has
a
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apply
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remarkable growth, having
the
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a
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percentage
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twice
than
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that
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the
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of the
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previous period. To add on, the Carribean has a remarkable
percentage
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that allows them to ranked as the second place as the most populated
country
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.
Furthermore
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, the graph predicts that in the
year
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2050,
Africa
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will have another great increase of people
on
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in
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their
country
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, having 62% as their
percentage
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. Asia will
also
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has
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have
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a
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apply
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significant growth,
while
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other
countries
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such
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as Europe, Latin
America
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/
Carribean
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Caribbean
, North
America
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, and
Ocenia
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Oceania
have a small increase in their
percentage
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. Despite the rise
of
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in
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population
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among the
countries
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, North
America
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crowned
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was crowned
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as the
country
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with the highest
population
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words population, countries, percentage, year, africa, country, america with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 8 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 3 times.
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