The charts below give information about attendance at entertainment venues and admission prices to those venues in 2009.

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The chart illustrates attendance at entertainment

venues

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while

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the table shows prices for these events in 2009.

Overall

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, the majority of visitors went to the cinema as

apposed

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opposed

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to other

venues

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, which was

due to

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cheap

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the cheap

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costs of it. As can be seen from the chart, sports events were the lowest attended

venues

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whereas

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themeparks

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theme parks

accounted for almost double of

venues

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. The numbers were 170 and 350 respectively. In comparison, cinemas were the highest attended

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, at 1050.

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, the prices for football games were the highest, where one

ticket

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cost

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between 71 and 75 dollars, and

family

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a family

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ticket

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cost

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around 280-298 dollars, which comprised seats for people.

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, basketball and cricket games

cost

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much less r at 34$ and 24$ for one

ticket

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respectively.

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, the figures for family

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ticket

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tickets

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were 135 and 80 dollars. The price of theme parks was

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apply

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70-210$,

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the

cost

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of the cinema was around 15-55$.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words venues, ticket, cost with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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4 paragraphs

156 words

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The charts below give information about attendance at entertainment venues and admission prices to those venues in 2009.

Some people think that university education should be free, while others believe students should pay for it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Young people prefer listening to music rather than listening to the news on the radio. Is this a positive or a negative trend? Provide reasons and examples for your opinion.

Some students prefer classes with frequent discussions between the professor and the students with almost no lectures. Other students prefer classes with many lectures and almost no discussions. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

There is no doubt that globalisation has benefited the world by bringing together people, business and nations. People who criticise it stand in the way of progress. To what extent do you agree or disagree?