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The maps below show the changes that have taken place at the seaside resort of Templeton between 1990 and 2005.

The maps below show the changes that have taken place at the seaside resort of Templeton between 1990 and 2005.
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The maps show the developments which took place at the seaside resort of Templeton between 1990 and 2005. Generally, a comparison of the two maps reveals a change from a largely rural to a mainly urban landscape. In 1990, the town was a much greener residential area with a large number of trees and individual
houses
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 , but during the next 15
years
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years,
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 the seaside experienced a number of dramatic changes. The most noticeable is that all of the trees along
South
Correct article usage
the South
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 railway were cut down, with all the individual
houses
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 were replaced
skyscrapers
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with skyscrapers
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.
Moreover
Linking Words
, a new industrial estate with
factory
Correct article usage
a factory
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 and ferry sprang up around
railway
Correct article usage
the railway
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 station. The trees and
houses
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 in the West-North were reconstructed to make way for
a
Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
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skyscrapers.
Further
Linking Words
 improvements were built supermarket
instead
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 of private
houses
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, they had experienced a negligible replacement
up market
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upmarket
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, between two roads.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words houses with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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