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The images below explains the process of how pollutants from modern life become acid rain that in turn pollutes the environment and the food chain.

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The illustrations below describe the process of how
pollutants
 from modern life become acid
rain
 that in turn pollutes the environment and the food chain.
Overall
,we can see that smoke from all of the human creatures
creat
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creates
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clouds
 which cross countries and countries. As
it
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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shows
Wrong verb form
shown
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 in the illustration,
clouds
aborb
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absorb
pollutants
 from factories,transport,
power
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and power
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 stations and
turns
Correct subject-verb agreement
turn
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 into
clouds
 that laden with
pollutants
,but
size
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the size
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 of
clouds
Correct article usage
the clouds
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stay
Correct subject-verb agreement
stays
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 the same.Trees and plants, the river that flows into the lake, all
this
 acid
rain
 falls on them, which cannot be said about the hills and fields because
this
rain
 does not flow there.
Furthermore
,after all
this
 acid
rain
 that goes into
river
Fix the agreement mistake
rivers
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 and lakes,
pollutants
 enter
food
Correct article usage
the food
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 chain which is not good
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Coherence & Cohesion
Work on organizing the essay more clearly with paragraphs dedicated to introduction, body, and conclusion.
Task Achievement
Develop the points with more specific details and examples to make the explanation clearer.
Task Achievement
You provided a clear introduction about the topic, setting a good basis for the explanation.
Coherence & Cohesion
There is a logical progression from the pollutants' sources to their effects, helping the reader follow the process described.
Task Achievement
The essay manages to integrate visuals into the text, addressing the visual element effectively.

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