Professional sports involve large sums of money and receive enormous media coverage. Meanwhile serious culture, including music, art and theatre, is badly neglected. This is making our society shallower. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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professional sports.
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culture
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as music,art, and theatre
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rarely get the attention that they
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situation is making our
society
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shallower. I totally agree with
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statement because it is very important to let
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learn more about the
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perfomances
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usually put so much
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only professional
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and they rarely do the same thing for serious
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performances. It is because
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are
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to watch
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common sports.
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interest that
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program rather than the serious
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so the
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and the
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prefer to put their attention more on
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basketball tournaments.
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, I fully agree that
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situation can lead them into
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mindset
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. Because they do not allow to know more about the
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perfomances
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. They tend to like to get
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the program that the
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offers.
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people rarely spend their time to see an art exhibition or even go the music theatre, most of them can get really bored with
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activities. Little that they know, there are various
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museum
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that offer serious
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in the most interesting ways. As I mentioned before, if the authority and the
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action going, it can
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lead
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society
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to be
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about the serious
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To sum up
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of money and
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attention it is commonly
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for
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professional sports. But I believe
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action, can lead
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society
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to be
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and have a shallow knowledge about serious
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culture
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