Professional sports involve large sums of money and receive enormous media coverage. Meanwhile serious culture, including music, art and theatre, is badly neglected. This is making our society shallower. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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amount
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of money and receive enormous
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coverage it is commonly
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for
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professional sports.
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serious
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culture
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cultures
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such
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as music,art, and theatre
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rarely get the attention that they
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.
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situation is making our
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shallower. I totally agree with
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statement because it is very important to let
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society
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learn more about the
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culture
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cultural
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perfomances
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performances
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. The
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usually put so much
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to
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only professional
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sports
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and they rarely do the same thing for serious
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performances. It is because
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society
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are
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prefere
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prefers
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common sports.
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interest that
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shows,
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people think
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about investing
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more
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program rather than the serious
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one.
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,
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society
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really
like
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to watch
basktetball
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basketball
so the
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authorities
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and the
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prefer to put their attention more on
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basketball tournaments.
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, I fully agree that
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situation can lead them into
shallow
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a shallow
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mindset
society
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. Because they do not allow to know more about the
culture
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perfomances
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performances
performance
. They tend to like to get
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by
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the program that the
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offers.
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, in
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people rarely spend their time to see an art exhibition or even go the music theatre, most of them can get really bored with
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this
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activities. Little that they know, there are various
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museum
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museums
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and
theatre
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theatres
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that offer serious
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in the most interesting ways. As I mentioned before, if the authority and the
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keep
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action going, it can
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truly
lead
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society
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to be
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about the serious
culture
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it self
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itself
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.
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,
received
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receives
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large
amount
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amounts
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of money and
media
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attention it is commonly
involve
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involved
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for
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in
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professional sports. But I believe
this
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action, can lead
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society
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to be
close minded
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close-minded
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and have a shallow knowledge about serious
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culture
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cultural
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performances.

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