The maps below show a science park in 2008 and the same park today. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The maps below show a science park in 2008 and the same park today.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The maps given illustrate the development of a science
park
from 2008 and recent days.
Overall
, the
park
is more modernized along many amenities have been constructed but the green areas are fewer than in the past. To commence with, the
park
originally consisted of several buildings, roads, woodlands, and grasslands.
However
, a grassland in the northwest of the
area
has been chopped down to make
an
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open land where the Research and Development building has been constructed.
Similarly
, the grassland next to the car
park
has
also
been destroyed and the cyber security has been widened. In the northeast of the
area
, a reception was demolished but no one building has been developed there. As regards the centre of the
area
, the car pack has been shrunken. A new cycle path has been constructed beside the road from the west to the north.
Similarly
, a new station has been added to facilitate the railway with a new path which connects the station and the car
park
. To the south of the cycle path, an IT centre has been changed into an Innovation centre.
Moreover
, a Bus stop
also
has been added in the west of the
area
.
Finally
, all the woodlands, the business units, and the offices remained the same.
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