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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise th einformation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise th einformation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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There are
two
 maps illustrating the way to the city hospital between 2007 and 2010.
Overall
, it is evident that the access
of
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to
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hospital
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the hospital
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center
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centre
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 become more complex and extended than before with new areas around the hospital
while
 the position of
hospital
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the hospital
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 still
remained
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remains
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 the same. Looking at the details, the hospital
road
, which linear path to the hospital with six bus stops on both sides of the
road
in
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apply
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2007,
had been
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was
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 constructed to be more compound by building
two
 roundabouts between
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the
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city
road
 and
ring
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the ring
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road
 in the next three years.
In addition
, a bus station was built on the left side of
hospital
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the hospital
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road
 and connected with
two
 roundabouts in 2010. A car park was
conjoined
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created
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 for staff and
public
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the public
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 in 2007.
However
, by 2010,
two
 car parks
was
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were
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 made for different categories
which
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apply
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one for
public
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the public
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 in the east of the hospital connected with
ring
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Ring Road
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road
 and another one for staff on the right side of
hospital
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the hospital
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road
.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words two, road with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • carriageway
  • roundabout
  • dual
  • interchange
  • pedestrian
  • footpath
  • commuter
  • facilities
  • accessibility
  • congestion
  • transit
  • urban planning
  • modernization
  • demolished
  • erected
  • adjacent
  • connectivity
  • redirected traffic
  • enhanced
  • displaced
  • underpass
  • bypass
  • renovate
  • capacity
  • upgrade
  • satellite view
  • aerial perspective
  • layout
  • zone
  • implemented changes
  • decongest
  • flow of traffic
  • vehicular movement
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